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Originally Posted by david ckwee
Hey Seraphim,
Firstly, thanks for your review! I really appreciated that.
-The tempo it is written at was actually faster when I first heard it in my mind yeah. I think it should be acceptable, but pray, is it too fast?
-Repetition of theme in more than one key ( errr... Im not sure whether What you meant by this, would you mind elaborating? )
-Extravagant Accompaniment ( er... again, sorry but yeah, You mind elaborating? Or rather explain, for I er don't know what youre pointing towards...  )
Actually, I might be inclined to say that the tempation to "cut and paste" the accompaniment and ornate just the piano right hand was too great, but I realised that It has produced a rather sloppy work. I am sorry for that, yeah. 
For the Pseudo Fugue, er... I dint intend it to be a fugue, but the problem is what, erm, did you mean by pseudo? (pardon me, my english is not strong..) 
Thanks alot, once again, and I do really hope you can reply to my questions!  |
1) It's quite common for composers to go too fast in tempo. They know the music so well that what might seem like a fast tempo to others seems normal to them.
2) The jump to a higher key to replay the initial "subject"
3) Not necessarily a bad thing. I actually like it alot. I simply meant that the accompaniment draws a lot of attention to itself.
4) It doesnt really sound sloppy but it does feel like it lacks variety. For some kinds of pieces this is ok. Pachelbels canon has the same eight notes run as accompaniment through the entire piece over and over and over ...
5) Pseudo means fake or false. I simply meant that it hinted at a fugal section when the second voice appeared to mimic the first.
I hope I've made sense to you.