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This piece had an interesting structure and was full of interesting effects and interesting melodies. I think there is one problem with it and that is that the piece gets a little boring because you stay within the same basic tonal framework for the full five minutes. There isnt a whole lot of tension created. I think adding a developmental section in the middle of the piece where you explore your material in different tonal areas. Your three main ideas (that I see), the opening idea, the Tempo II scherzando idea and the third idea in 5/4 are all very interesting and are quite different. But you can explore them more and make the music feel like its really going somewhere in this developmental section because right now the piece, for me, sort of just meanders around these three different ideas. Still, the piece has a lot of potential and your part writing and knowledge of effects as well as your interesting melodies are quite well-done. Just make sure your music leads somewhere and make sure to develop all your material! Good job and keep working!
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