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SimenN, are you really trying to write in a Classical style? It's difficult to know what to say to you unless I know where you're coming from.
There are elements of this that are true to the Classical style, but I get the feeling when you play this back you're not really listening to what works and what doesn't, or you'd have changed some things.
My advice would be to listen carefully to what you've written, then compare it to what you hear in pieces from the Classical period. Try to identify how what you've written differs (favourably and unfavourably, with a courageous and critical ear) and how you might improve.
If you'd like me to show you in more detail what I think you might do better, let me know, either here or privately, and I'll sketch it out for you. I hesitate to do that until I know where you're coming from and what you want, though.
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