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Hello!
I listened to your piano piece and I think that at the beginning it sounds simple and fairly interesting, but the transition to the denser section is not very smooth and after that I lost my interest, because it wasn't very cohesive. When you threw that Christmas theme in the score I didn't hear any further (it didn't really fit to the piece and I don't quite understand why you use it in the first place).
There are many interesting ideas, but I think you should organise them better. You should also correct your notation and add phrasing and personally I would even suggest you to simplify the score a bit. There are moments where both hands are written in two voices or more and the writing is pretty dense. I don't see any particular reason in this and it's not very "elegant" either...
I would suggest you as an exercise to try to compose an easy, but interesting piano piece giving attention to your harmony and your counterpoint. Here are some piano pieces you might consider studying for simple and clear, but nonetheless interesting writing:
Ravel - Prelude
Macdowell - To a Wild Rose
Satie - 6 Gnossienes, 3 Gymnopedies
Debussy - The girl with the flaxen hair (a bit more complex)
Prokofiev - I, II, VIII, X, XVII Fugitive Visions
Bartok - Mikrokosmos
Alexandros
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