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I would say from measures 61 - 80. The chords in the right hand may make the texture to thick at times and I am unsure of their motivic relation. Again, the idea may be good just needs refinement.
Also , the arpeggiation of the F major chord is a bit harmonically static and could be explored much more. Also around measures 41 - 48 the pedal part seems to either overpunctaute the eight note rhythmn or confuse it with some meandering lines --- again a case where you have new ideas crowding in before the ones presented are fully presented.
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