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Dan -
What I suggested you do with your work of 2 years ago you do here with excellence. Very toght motivic unity, great harmonic twists and resolutions and very convincing dramatic arch.
Only criticism - the last say 30 second could be extended another 20 - 30 seconds at most -- possibly the dissonances and their resolutions held a little longer -- even using some slight rhythmic dislocations would be great. But this is a small thing. Wouldn't change anything else. Just check that YOU are convinced about the ending.
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