Thanks for listening.
Thanks also for the comments.
A few notes: I will look closely at the dissonances, and see if I can do anything to attenuate the harshness.. I would rather a good reception than 100% artistic integrity. Changing one note doesn't hurt too much.
You're dead right about the 6ths - the extra B clashes with a Bb, very briefly. I honestly like these little passing clashes, and that one happens once or twice at most.
We don't have vibes, and glock. is certainly the wrong instrument for that musical character.
No, I shan't be conducting it, but I should have a fair degree of input.
If I'm lucky it'll be programmed as part of a big concert, so a good few people there!
Wish me luck!
And thanks again. I will possibly post an updated score soon.