I really like it. Your melody is good, however, there is nothing distinct. I wish that there was a part that continued throughtout...like, a motif or something. Would make it easier to listen to for a nonmusician.
I realise you have already written so much, and I dont expect you to change anything. But, for the future...try and keep an entire piece sounding like it is in fact ONE piece.
Thats all I have to say really. Its very nice, and I love your harmony.
Its good
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