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QC has picked up on all the notational issues now.
As to the piece itself, I found the main flaw was that the main theme was a little too dull.
Like Tomás, I also enjoyed the various waltzes etc. strewn throughout the piece, that kept up the interest.
Your use of harmony was certainly interesting, and actually a successful experiment. However, you perhaps need to work with a good harmony textbook for a while to solidify your understanding of harmony.
Certain things give it away that you're guessing by ear what notes to use, like a chord that was spelt G# C Eb. That's obviously an Ab major chord, and should have Ab, not G#.
I do hope you'll continue to experiment, and try new things. Even if they aren't successful, you'll learn something.
I think this is a rather decent piece. Just a little dull in places for me, and a couple of awkward bits, but mostly good.
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