Here is what Berlioz just told me on MSN Messenger:
\/| diz:
comment then
|\/| diz:
even if it's just "meh"
|\/| diz:
xD
So here goes my review:
meh.
*leaves*
*walks back in*
Well, in my opinion it would have overall worked better if you had stuck to the pattern you began with. After 20-ish seconds you began deviating from it, and while it was alright for a while, I didn't feel the part after 00:51 worked - it felt odd and 'unconnected.' When you return to the opening pattern after that passage, the harmony doesn't seem to work to my ear, and I continued to have that feeling as it developed, as if the harmony didn't 'give a shit' anymore and decided to let loose. Although I think the transition back to the opening pattern worked, the one towards the 'coda' once again felt unnatural to my ear. The ending worked to a certain degree.
*leaves*