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Originally Posted by wayne-scales
Harmony = Gone
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hehehe. good.
ok, comments measure-by-measure:
measures 1 - 4: I'd think that the trio of clarinet and bassoons might be a tad heavy. you might consider simply one cl. and one bsn. that way you get the compounded timbre of the single and double reed.
measure 4: be VERY careful of sudden changes in both register AND timbre.
in this particular case, you are leaping up 2 octaves, and changing to a VERY different timbre - the flute and oboe in octaves.
One important aspect of this sort of exercise is to keep nice smooth transitions from one set of instrumetns to another, instead of just jumping from one to another.
measure 5: your clarinets coming in in octaves this way will definitaly SOUND like an instrumental entrance. I don't think it suits the concept of smooth transitions and a smooth melodic line.
measure 6 - 7: here we have the same issue: a radical change of timbre, as well as a shift in register. Your 2nd oboe dropping off suddenly from a VERY pungent low register will sound like a sudden "hole" in the texture.
I also dont think that a flute and an oboe are sufficient to create the effect of that crescendo at measure 7.
It is important to learn how to orchestrate dynamic changes, rather than simply indicate crescendos and dynamics. Smooth entries on instruments, on different beats, will create a gradual increase in density of timbre.
measure 10: I don't think the oboes are the best choice for a sudden piano effect. Particularly since one is, again, in that particularly pungent extreme low register.
measure 12: I think that doubling flute and oboe on this phrase detracts from the "echo" effect of the phrase. Look carefully at the phrase. There was a shift in dynamic to a very soft dynamic, then that single little phrase repeats at the end. You did the preceding phrase ending with a solo oboe... so why not another solo instrument? and why the large shift in register? by shifting register up like that you bring a great deal of importance TO that little echo section. It should be almost a musical after-thought.
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OK, a good first try. Care to try again?
You can check the version I did and examine the transitions and register changes.