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Omar -
Honestly, I do not think this a successful piece. Harmonically the sudden shifts into C minor area w/ a flat 4 and other areas do not make sense (specifically msr 90 - 93, 70 - 73 are some examples) as the return to or away from C major is underprepared. There are times when the music is too thin mm 49-50 for example would sound too bare on the piano. Your cadence at the end sounds too redundant and unprepared. Lastly, the piano writing is much like a Clementi Sonatina which is fine in itself but you haven't decided if you are going to follow the model or break with it creatively and intelligently. For example, the broken octaves and scale runs have been done to death esp with roots in the bass.
Now on the positive side, your harmonic wanderings are the most interesting part and I could see this being a nice parody of a Clementi Sonatina (think early Poulenc doing this)
Plus I like how you exploit the pianos lower and higher registers. The more contemporary piano writing in the middle seems like a good idea for contrast and "parody"
Sorry if I sound harsh but there is SO much more you can do with the piano. I advise listening to Prokofiev - Vision Fugitives, Scraibin, Bartok, Ginastera's Piano Concertos, and listen VERY carefully to the late Beethoven Sonatas - the last three especially. And do listen to Clementi's Sonatas - very interesting stuff and foreshadows Beethoven's middle period piano writing. Plus Mozart - some of his late sonatas too.
As for non-classical, Cecil Taylor for wild piano writing, Oscar Peterson, Errol Garner, George Shearing, Bud Powell, Art Tatum - all offer intersting stuff.
But to start, I suggest studying the Clementi Sonatas first. Then move to Prokofiev, Poulenc etc...
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