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Much better technically, John, and I can hear the melody more now. I think you should break this down and decide what is an A section, what is a B section, and so on. I think you could turn this into a Sonata if it had more structural discipline. As for right now, it is an etude, but it doesn't exactly serve to work on anything in particular. This is one of those works that has real potential, and you might have to tear it up beyond recognition to get the finished work to be something you really like. Great work, and much advancement from your other compositions! Keep 'em coming!
Sean Christopher Stork
Nightengale Incorporated
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Sean Christopher Stork
Nightingale Incorporated
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