Evan

Hey, nice!

I like both of these very much, especially "afternoon walk." I'm pressed for time so I'll make this short.

In Slave Driver, I think your imagery is good. I didn't think your melodies were very original or creative, with a lot of returning to the tonic note. This most likely was intentional, and it gives it a sort of...spontaneous feel. A very gypsy spontaneous feel.

The low grumble motif at the beginning is good. Laborious, heavy, monotonous. Slave driving, of course. Not sure if you still had that at the end. It's as if the song ends while the slaves are on break.

As for Afternoon Walk, I think you could use some more dissonance and leading tones. Right now it's a bit stale. Make the melody and harmony pull at each other, rather than go in stride. I think that would ultimately make the piece more enjoyable and interesting to listen to.

Are these supposed to tell a story, or play in the background while a story is told? If this is supposed to be background music, feel free to make it boring. Don't want it to interrupt the scene. But if this is the story itself, see if you can give it a little more depth and flavor.

Hope this helps! Nothing too technical. I really enjoyed both of these.

Cheers,
Evan