This piece could stand to be approximately 6 minutes or more longer! This is the kind of organ kind of stuff I love to hear. It's really quite lush and exciting at most times. However, you take one idea, and play it out exactly the same way for a while, and then break suddenly into a new idea without much tradition or even closing of the past idea. Set it up in such a way that it is always building upon itself. Just play around with it as much as possible and see how much you can squeeze from this piece.
You can put more stuff in the pedals, too, I think you have them playing whole notes nearly the entire time! Have you ever looked at a Bach transcript for organ? He has runs going on in the pedals sometimes! It must be hard as heck to play, but man does it ever sound cool!
I liked the middle part around the 1:30 mark where you have the manual going crazy with the runs. I think you could have extended that into the slower lush movement, or atleast had something lingering over the top. I would personally enjoy hearing triplet octaves above right there. Vaughan Williams does that kind of stuff all the time.
These are just a few comments. I enjoyed this piece, and I don't typically enjoy keyboard type of stuff. If you give me a score, I can give you more precise notes on what I do and do not like about this piece. As it stands, I enjoy it! If you want me to enjoy it less, give me a score!
