To frantz:
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i think that you could add more fire specially to the solo part. although it is nice as it is, the solo voice is somehow predictable or maybe too much shy, attached always to the same patterns of motion and melodic design which are basicly chords in arpeggio. there is less melodic boldness and adventurousness to this voice than i could expect from a soloist. that can be just my taste, but maybe more surprises, allowing your Muse to open full wings and fly, could add a greater appeal to this already fine composition.
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Thats exactly what I was thinking. Though I feel the arpeggio motions were acceptable, as they are present in the ritornello melody, there could have certainly been more zest in the solo line. I think part of the problem was that I was still stuck in the "orchestral writing" mode of thinking when I was writing the solo line. If there was a way to make it feel more improvisatory, that would be great. That would take some playing around at the keyboard.
As a keyboard solo, it's not very impressive, but would the current solo line be more impressive if played on a violin?
And Brandon, thank you! I'll be cranking out a faster version in a bit .... with violin solo.