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I don't find appealing, at least to my ears, the 6/4 chord in measure 18 .
The rest is quite great!
Your piece, in my opinion, is lacking of a clear theme though at times, you give the listener some hints of motives waving around from time to time.( Leave the metamorphosis of your motives for the development if you may). State firmly what are you trying to convey in this piece, though if pure harmony works for u k. disregard my insights.
some jazzy notes around 50 and 54.I like it.
Well, for your development, repetition, modulation, transposition, ornamentation, of the intial material will do.
Thanks for sharing.
Greetings.
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