Very nice work.
I think it works very well.
My suggestions are.
Each of the little scenes seems very short...
How does the work manage to pile up in 9 seconds?
But you're writing to cues, so that's not really your problem.
Also, the Out of Control section did get really crazy!
But then again, that's the point.
My only real actual suggestion is that the dissappointment didn't seem disappointing.
There could have been some kind of anticlimax there.
It was just a continuation of the last section with a small change at the end.
I like your depression piece. Quite atmospheric.
My favourite was the start(first ~24 secs) though. Very nice
