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Good progress, you are working fast ! But I really encourage you that you give more time on composing. even if it is only poatatoes, have more patience and really like what you are doing. Play it over and over and ask yourself do you REALLY like it ?
You have added some seventh chords, that's good. But it is not consistent. The file that I uploaded I put some more 7ths and sometimes 9th chords so it will be more consistent. One thing we lack right now is continuity. There is no tensions, and resolutions. We need to put more cadances in there using dominant and diminished chords. I put some of my ideas on the score, its only to give you a bit more idea, I recommend you work on your own version. So far I am liking the A section, It could be good. As I said it only needs more tensions.
the B section needs a lot of more work. As you have already realised it is very repetitive. You need to give your piece more direction instead of coming back to same chords. I hope you know what I mean. I am not going to give you more ideas, I want you to work on it and realise what is wrong yourself. Your biggest problem so far is your patience. Otherwise I believe you can compose much better if only you can be more patient.
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