What exactly is the problem there, anything that could be fixed?
Also... anybody have an idea how to write the notes following the half notes? I assume that they would be best played with the right hand (right usually plays the higher material, right?

) but I'm not sure whether to use ledger lines, which stave to write them on, or which way to make the stems go if I put it on the bottom stave and how to indicate (in such case) that they ARE for the right hand and not the left or whether not to worry about that at all and just quite overworrying myself.
P.S. are the slurs completely unnecessary?
P.P.S. would that breath mark be clear in meaning? I want a brief pause there, just like taking a breath. Maybe buying enough time to make the pedal change.