Bagatelle No. 1

ur very talented keep it up
this is a very nice piece, just need a little polish and it will look pro
GREAT GREAT OPENING! starts in another key or you can say starts in subdominant
heres some things i think i would change:
1.some part of the melody doesn't have a direction where its going, m.15 F# seemed awkward. i think i know what ur trying to do ur trying to include every note in the chord, THOUGH that's not always necessary
2.the ending two measures doesnt connect well with the melody before it



oh yea, um just being random, measure 7 and 8 sounded like "spongebob square pants, spongebob.....SQUAREPANTs!!!" lol

keep writing good music!

Originally Posted by david ckwee

Very nice! However, I have a suggestion. Your melodic progression (well, its up and personal for everyone, just my thoughts), in M21, why dont you bring up the A an Octave higher? That would sound more pleasing to the ear, and well, more melodic (thats what I think, haha).

Thanks! I did it and it sounds good!




Thanks Z916!