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Old Jan 14 2007, 2:18 PM

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Celtic story

This is a piece for oboe and piano. Just as the name says it is a little piece of music based on the celtic way of life: first a slower part the assemble the easy and relaxed way of life and then a faster part for the folk. My teacher taught the melody of the oboe was much too simpel. But I am not sure about that.
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Old Jan 14 2007, 4:26 PM

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I like the piece, though I agree with your teacher; the melody is far too simple. Try to spruce it up with some dotted rhythms here and there, and add some form to the piece as a whole. Maybe after that last part return to the first section or something-- just a thought. It's a very nice start to a piece.
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Old Jan 14 2007, 4:42 PM

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Charming little piece, Midkemia.
May I ask where you're from?

Ok - now there are some issues to address with this piece.
At some points (mainly nearly the start) the oboe melody does not quite fit with the harmony being supplied by the piano. Sometimes these are just passing notes, but sometimes I feel it's just errors.
You have the piano left hand on it's own for far too much. E.g. the introduction. That could have been shortened, but still remained effective.
Another thing - the piano left hand from bar 34 is unneccesarily awkward - think about changing it to avoid the repeated notes.

All in all, your textures need beefed out (the simple style is nice; try thickening the texture without losing that), some of your sections need to be less simple, and you could try modulating at some point, to keep up the listener's interest. Also - Celtic music is usually based upon pentatonic scales, so you could trying using some more of them.

I liked the piece though - don't feel I'm being unneccesarily harsh; I just wish to help you improve.
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Old Jan 15 2007, 7:40 AM

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May I ask where you're from?
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I'm from Belgium.

And thanks for your advice, I gonna try to work on that things.
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Old Jan 16 2007, 7:53 AM

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Does anybody have some ideas for orchestrating my little piece?
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Old Jan 19 2007, 6:49 AM

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My new version with a new tittle: a Celtic Love Story
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