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Nice! I think it works very well. It is rather repetitive after a while, of course, so I hear it either as a background song to something else, or you should try to create a bit more variety, for example by giving the main melody played by the guitar to the flute once or twice, changing the theme rhythmically, juicing up the instrumental background by giving it a different "figuration" or rhythm than just held notes, adding some ornamentation to the melody, or even introduce some slightly different harmonies towards the end.
Personally, I found that the flute is a bit too much in the background throughout the piece. It sounds often more like part of the accompaniment than as a second main melody next to the guitar, which seems to dominate the piece. This has probably two reasons: First, the flute has often rather long notes on main harmonic tones, so it blends in rather well with the background and doesn't stick out, even in the parts where the flute has the actual melody, and the guitar has rhythmically repeating "accompaniment" tones. The guitar manages to come out very well, because it's rhythmically much more incisive.
Try "letting the flute off the leash" a bit more, i.e. letting it play more free melodies with passing notes that aren't necessarily part of the main harmony and more rhythmic variety (i.e. more shorter notes).
The other reason the flute often doesn't stand out is that it's often in a rather low register. I really like the parts when it goes above the stave, as there it can truly shine through the guitar. Let it go up a bit more. A flute in the lower register has a hard time sounding "solistic", especially if the background is rather thick.
But in general, well done! It's a very nice, "catchy" melody, that has a nice flow to it.
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