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I'm not sure what to call this song but i've started writing on it and got stuck.

This piece has possibilities but there is a lot of parallel motion between parts, especially doubling in octaves.

Are you intending a piece that could be played or just an electronic one? There are problems for a real ensemble. Instruments that can only play one note are playing two or three.

I muted the piano, flute 2, oboe 2, clarinet 1, bassoon 2, horn 2, trumpet 2 and violin 2 to remove most of the doubling. To me the sound is as good if not better. (The passages with more than one note for instruments that can't do this can be moved to the corresponding muted part.)

With some rhythmic variation, the chromatic ideas of what you have could be extended. Or use some question and answer between different instruments.

What you have has very much the sound of a finale (ending) so perhaps look to adding on to the front and building up to what you have.

Edit: This piece of mine is an octet which uses some parallel motion between parts but not octaves. See here

well where you see two notes per staff i'm intending to be more than one 1st trumpet, or first flute.

Originally Posted by blm22

well where you see two notes per staff i'm intending to be more than one 1st trumpet, or first flute.

Yes, I assumed that was what you meant. But there is a section where the 1st flute and oboe have 2 notes each and the 2nd flute and oboe have none - that seems odd scoring.

Scoring issues aside, the doubling in octaves of an instrument is often combining its louder range with its softer range - the MIDI playback is not what would really happen.

hmm, well add, and delete what you think I should do.

Originally Posted by blm22

hmm, well add, and delete what you think I should do.

It is your piece - so you have to decide where to go with it - there is no one right way. The problems with the score are something you can fix if you want. Beyond that is what you want to do musically.

Are you writing a piano concerto? Then you need more piano, possibly a solo. Otherwise, perhaps the piano part isn't necessary.

Musically, I have said what you have sounds to me like a finale so I suggested working up to it by introducing the motives in a milder, possibly slower version, before what you have. And perhaps have a new section with a contrasting mood to give an intro, middle, finale structure.

Ok thnx for your input you have given alot of help