Julia's Voice.

tenor10, greetings!

I enjoyed the transparent texture of the accompaniment and the simple, beautiful melodic lines of the voice.

Some beautiful touches... e.g. m.14!

Cheers!

Thank you so much.
Im so glad you said transparent! because that is exactly what I was thinking.

Thanks again

A very pretty song you have here! But there are some problems regarding how you have set the text rhythmically. The first line will feel like: 'SO smooth SO sweet SO sil-VRY!!!' which doesn't really make sense if spoken that way. It feels like the 'so's need to be as pick-ups so the accents would be: 'so SMOOTH so SWEET, so SIL-vry.', which is closer to how someone would speak it. This happens in other places as well.

Another thing is that you need to slur your melismas, even if it's only 2 notes on one syllable. The slurs are an easy indication for the singer not to move on to the next syllable. This is useful since singers get commonly sung phrases and words they know, they sometimes want to rush ahead and finish the sentence but a slur will tell them to hang on to that syllable. It may seem redundant, but it's necessary for performers.

Nice job!

Thanks for the comments, I know people want it to be pickups, but I want it on the downbeat and I know its not how it would be spoken, but O well. haha.

And regarding slurs, and a vocal student myself, I KNOW the importance of slurs, I hadnt gotten to all of them yet, but thank you for the reminder.

The notes on 00:00:43 and 00:00:48 (voice) seem to don´t know where they´re going.

The unison notes at 00:00:57 sound empty.

A melody (voice) with to many stops; most of the stops sound awkward.

But the piece is enjoyable.

It shows that you are singing- I can honestly say that I've seen a lot of my composer coleages set some really non-idiomatic vocal lines but this works. I think the repeated notes are great because they give the singer a chance to show of perfect tone, diction and some phrazing- especial since they're singing about a good singer

I agree with oingo86 about the word stresses. The so's arent that big of a problem, but silvry really loses it's anamatpoetic (spelling?) quality with the stress so strongly put on the weak sylable.

Great to see someone writing some nice, singable artsongs, though. keep it up!

Thank you so much. I'm glad you are one the people here that "get" me.
Im glad you enjoyed it.
About silv'ry, thats how its spelled in the poem from the 17th Century.
The I set it, it should almost feel unmetered, and some have a problem with that, whatever, I like it haha!
Thanks again.