Just Like RainDrops

Unfortunately I can only go by the score. My biggest concerns are the following:

Check how your lyrics align with the notes. Seems notes missing for text. Second, dynamics and tempi above notes for vocal parts so that the vocalist can read the words easily. Also, when you have an e flat in your key signatutre, you do not require a D# UNLESS you are moving to e natural and implying a tonal shift. Third, I think there will be a problem with "love of" around mm 59 - 61. Love is a dipthong which with the word "of" may sound like a stutter. Fourth sing all of your lines! It seems in some sections you did in others you didn't . One of the most important things about writing vocally --- even if you aren't a vocalist, at least you will get a rough sense what is difficult and what is easy.

I understand what ur saying....thanks a lot..you've pointed out some things i really need to fix..and i will most definatley sing my lines over

Hey tariq,
Nice stuff and ideas here. Some score isses though. Watch the crowding of the staves, make sure they dont overlap. Also, the note head for spoken text is an x, look on fianle to try to find it. Finally, dynamic for singers always go above the staff. .
A lot of the chords are nice, like everyone has been saying the alto line is say to high. Consider some revoicing of the chords. Some of the chords around mes. 47 were a little sudden for me. The end as well was really sudden and abrupt, i dont i just felt weird.
Other than that pretty nice.

Thanks scott i'll be sure to apply all of the necesary adjustment thanks a lot man

You did a good job on this piece. The harmonies flow very nicely and since I am a bit of a harmony nut, kudos for you! The lyrics were well written and I liked how they were sung at differing moments. However, like myself all too often, you have gotten yourself in a bit of a dreamy, slow rut. The whole song flows wonderfully, but there is nothing standing out from the piece. Music is tension and release, so while there is release in 'Raindrops', there is very little tension. Overall, though, this is an excellant piece of work. Great work!

thanks a lot hefree. I see what your saying that nothing stands out ...but could you explain urself as far as "tenision" ....but still thanks a lot

what i mean by tension is that some parts should hold a bit of suspense to keep the audience interested. then that suspense should be released, relaxing the listener. think of an action movie, the scenes where the hero is about to die some grotesque death keep the viewers on the edge of their seats, but then he saves the day and the audience feels relieved, yet satisfied. Music should be the same way, although, depending on the song, maybe less melodramatic, get my point? Did I clarify for you?

ues now i get it..thanks a lot i'll be sure to revise ..thanks a lot everyone is picking up on something different and it will help me a lot

my last comment was really tariq talkng,
i hate the school computers... lol

thanks scott...could anyone give me a place in which they feel that the song seems to lose direction