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Hi Máté,
That was so much better! Excellent! I really liked what you did on the second minim of bar 3 - moving from II6/3 to V4/2 over a stationary bass - that's really classy. Nice use of the passing 6/4 as well!
I only have two very minor criticisms, just for you to note for the future. In the C major progression - you move from IV to V/iii across bars 1-2. This is OK in principle, but the roots are a tritone apart, and therefore 'unrelated' (that's what Tovey said at least). You do see the progression from time to time, but it is usually reserved for moments expressing great anguish. The tritone was associated with the devil and suffering in Bach's era! Do you know the chorale 'Es ist genug'? In Riemenschneider it's no. 216 - and the tritone is used to great effect (in one part the bass moves chromatically down from A all the way to D#).
However, that's not quite in keeping with the rest of your harmonies!
Your feminine endings are also very good, except for one tiny problem in the f minor one. In bar 2, you go from vii to V7. This progression isn't very effective, mainly because V7 and vii are almost the same - V7 is like vii over the dominant note! Which other chords do you think might have worked instead?
If you don't mind I'd still like you to do the other exercise I set out in the previous post if you can. It's quite a lot of work, but it will get you even more used to using all the techniques we've covered so far at the same time. After all, they are things that if you get right now, will mean you can compose good music forever.
Matt
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