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Originally Posted by Stevemc90
let's try again
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this one feels better than the other one.
My only issue with this one is that you should be careful about creating a non-diatonic environment through-out the piece, then suddenly dropping us a big ol' honking diatonic chord like at measure 18 (that 7th chord). Particularly the I-V type chords that follow in measures 19-21. That's lovely, but just a tiny bit outside the realm of what you've created as a harmonic universe for the piece so far.
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Jul 16 2008, 4:56 PM
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