Hey Guys,
Wow! So many people have posted already

Thanks for all the nice comments about my melody! I wish I could have finished with it before I posted it online, but I was too excited about doing my own version and seeing what other people thought that I decided to post it anyway - thats why the last measure was unfinished, as David pointed out.
Well, I don't think I stayed too closely within the rules

, but after all it is my melody lol

The later half remains relatively unchanged, the first half is pretty different though. I think I might need to chop off the end section too, seems to take away the dramatic edge. I saved it as a the original piano sonata, and also as a work for church organ and a violin sonata for a bit of contrast (without the end section). Please tell me which of the three you prefer, and if I should scrap the end section.
Really enjoyed Frantz piece (very Baroque! and loved your counter melodies - very your style!!) and Arthur's (had zest but was very short); Hihi's percussion ensemble (very Monkey Island 2 lol) and David Guinness (yours is almost exactly like mine in some parts, its scary!). Anyway, thanks again guys, and please comment on mine.
Regards
Pravin
P.S
I think its in C minor - could someone with better knowledge of theory please tell me? lol. thanks