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Hi there Pukino
Good first effort at composing for piano and orchestra. A very nice piece, but I have a few comments.
Near the beginning, the strings are following the melody somewhat forcefully. It seems that the piano is handling the melody well enough and the strings just make it too powerful too early, and it makes the piece feel very stop/start at that point as stringed instruments I find arn't suited to playing the same note twice in sucession as much as the piano is. Having said that, I do enjoy the melody very much and I do all the way through.
I also like the variation you have throughout the piece and the way you comeback to the main motif. It keeps the later stages of the piece interesting but familiar, so that's good.
At 1:45, I think you need a crescendo of the piano so that it goes into the next [hrase a bit more smoothly. At the moment I thik there is too much of a jump in volume there. And then at 2:50, the piano is a little too strong, and it completely drowns out everything else. That's just slightly the wrong balance there I think.
Overall very nice piece though! Hope I was of some help.
Fox.
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