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Wow, I'm impressed! I can hardly believe this is your first composition, Good job and congratulations on becoming a composer.
The piece isn't depresssing, and only minimally disturbing. It definately sounds like Shostakovich!!!
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I liked the viola solo, it always needs more attention. One things that makes this piece a little dull and holds it back is the lack of intersting rythms. The piece kind of made up for it with its intersting harmonies, but that really stuck out. half notes, quarter notes, and eigth notes aren't going to cut it. Also, add some dynamics, I noticed that when the cello had the eighth note melody and the violins and viola had the harmony thing, they sort of overpowered it. the augmented unisons didn't help either. Definately add some dynamics to the piece - especially to bring that lower register cello passage out. Also, add some articulation, staccatti on that cello part would make it stick out even more! Here I added two midis for comparison, One is the regualr, and the second one is with added accents and staccatti.
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This is a really impressive first work. I look foward to future works of yours.
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