Need Help With Rock Song Lyrics

Originally Posted by DrPangloss

I think scansion is one of the most important things in lyric writing, because without it, the audience can't understand what your saying.

Grammar's pretty important too, brah.

I do agree, but I think scansion's even more important. There are places and ways to forsake grammar because of a style or a joke. However, sans scansion, you're lost.

Reread.

Originally Posted by spherenine

Grammar's pretty important too, brah.

brah rape?

Congratulations on your excellent first post. Welcome to YC. Now post music.

*Bangs head against wall*

You know, I read my post over three or four times, because it sounded like you were commenting on my grammar, but I couldn't find anything.

Until the fifth time.

You must excuse me, it's been a long day of teaching. I'll fix that straight away.

Originally Posted by DrPangloss

*Bangs head against wall*

You know, I read my post over three or four times, because it sounded like you were commenting on my grammar, but I couldn't find anything.

Until the fifth time.

You must excuse me, it's been a long day of teaching. I'll fix that straight away.

Heh, if everything else wasn't so flawless, I wouldn't have had to pick on that minor detail, but you made me do it.

Originally Posted by DrPangloss

My point being that the stress in the word "city" lands on the first syllable, where the rhyming portion of the word lands on the second. If the word is pronounced properly (SIT-ee) then it doesn't rhyme. If the stress is moved to the second syllable (as you compared to the word "rhapsody") then the word is not being pronounced correctly, and there's more room for error in understanding the lyric. No one pronounces the word "si-TEE." Bad scansion will pull the audience out of the song if they have to stop and think about what the word was rather than just listen.

I think scansion is one of the most important things in lyric writing, because without it, the audience can't understand what you're saying.

The stress could still be on the first half of 'city,' but more emphasis would be on the "rock" - city would be more like an afterthought, almost the point that there was no stress on any part of the word at all....

~Kal

I added some more parts. See first post. Also Please dont be afraid to change anything you want with it.