one of my first

this was one of my first pieces on notewowrthy. needless to say its not too good but i thought there were some nice elements here and there.
comments?

It reminds me of age of empires. With its "adventurous" feel.

i've never played that game. but thanks!

Potential

But seriously, here's my critiques:

1. Work on your harmonic vocabulary. This peice was entirely in one key with no accidentals whatsoever. Even a few accidentals strategically placed can add a lot of character to a song.
2. Your rhythm was great... in the beginning. But once you lost that driving, complex rhythm, the song lost it's appeal for me. I'm not saying you shouldn't change your rhythmic motifs up, but make sure that the others make the song stronger.
3. Give it a big ending. This song totally needs one of those classic Beethoven endings. i-V-i never hurt anybody.

But that's just my opinion, others may disagree.

thank you for your comments and advise

I agree... it does remind me of age of empires. I could definitely see it as part of an adventure game.

thank you

Yea I agree with the others...it does have a sort of video game feel to it...

advice wise I agree with Fermion, but that will all come with practice, you did say it was one of your first pieces, and it was certainly better than one of my first pieces.
well done

Lex

Hey, this is what im talking about, the beginning was good! After time though as mentioned above, it did get a little "out of rythum." But keep it up, I want to hear some progression.