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Old Dec 30 2007, 12:24 AM

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Piano Sonata

By Michelle Harada and Omar Sanchez (ASCAP)


this was originally hers....

3 separate pieces, not complete....

so I told her I was going to combine them and finish it for her..... so her it is



Piano Sonata - eSnips, share anything


Edit: took off "I miss her"
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Old Dec 30 2007, 12:27 AM

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I like it a lot actually, does it have a name besides piano sonata?
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Old Dec 30 2007, 12:29 AM

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nope....
She wanted a sonata...so if its not....lets just keep it as a sonata to make her happy
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Old Dec 30 2007, 10:47 AM

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Since this is three pieces combined and not one individual work, I will avoid comments on the music itself, but any other aspect I can find.
1) Your first transition was ok, but I think if you wanted to combine them freely, I would've used a long note in the Piano, and start the left hand accompaniment under it. That's just me, but I think what you did will work.
2) I like your development. You really play around with the notes that you have already.
3) Cromatic scales are overrated. Is it possible that you can just use a major scale, or even a seven or other odd chord arpeggio in place of it? I think the chromatic scale is an OK way to get to the recapitulation, but it is a bit stereotypical... and yet it IS very sonata-y.

Pretty piece! I liked it. Remember, everything I have posted is just food for thought. You can either ignore everything, or use ALL of my suggestions, just don't feel obliged to.
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Old Dec 30 2007, 1:34 PM

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I like it alot, very classy and simple in its own way, but very nice.
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Old Dec 30 2007, 1:50 PM

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I like it alot, very classy and simple in its own way, but very nice.
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Since this is three pieces combined and not one individual work, I will avoid comments on the music itself, but any other aspect I can find.
1) Your fist transition was ok, but I think if you were to really want to combine them freely, I would've used a long note in the Piano, and start the left hand accompaniment under it. That's just me, but I think that will work.
2) I like your development. You really play around with the notes that you have already.
3) Cromatic scales are overrated. Is it possible that you can just use a major scale, or even a seven or other odd chord arpeggio in place of it? I think the chromatic scale is an OK way to get to the recapitulation, but it is a bit stereotypical... but it IS very sonata-y.

Pretty piece! I liked it. Remember, everything I have posted is just food for thought. You can either ignore everything, or use ALL of my suggestions, just don't feel obliged to.

Thanks both of you!
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Old Jan 2 2008, 6:37 AM

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Maybe lay off the chromatics a little bit. It wasn't the most suspenseful piece either, but I enjoyed it all of the way through, which is kind of odd.

I like how it was really simply structured, but had like a complex underlining to it. (I hate not being about to be able to specifically explain myself.)

But it was very charming, ... yea..charming. It's something I could listen to while going to sleep..and no, that's not an insult! - I listen to Mozart every night when going to sleep!
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Old Jan 2 2008, 3:36 PM

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I do too...hahaha....
But it gets me more exited, and don't fall asleep...

Thanks for Your Comments, and will let her know....
she is going to be suprised people actually like it....hahaha
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Old Nov 8 2008, 10:49 PM

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Ok, Here is the updated one sorry it took so long. I just hardly went on here.

anyways here it is so enjoy. I uploaded the .pdf, mus and midi file.
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File Type: mus piano sonata.MUS (52.6 KB, 3 views)
File Type: mid Piano Sonata midi.MID (16.8 KB, 9 views)
File Type: pdf piano sonata.pdf (204.6 KB, 15 views)

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Old Nov 9 2008, 12:14 PM

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Omar -

Honestly, I do not think this a successful piece. Harmonically the sudden shifts into C minor area w/ a flat 4 and other areas do not make sense (specifically msr 90 - 93, 70 - 73 are some examples) as the return to or away from C major is underprepared. There are times when the music is too thin mm 49-50 for example would sound too bare on the piano. Your cadence at the end sounds too redundant and unprepared. Lastly, the piano writing is much like a Clementi Sonatina which is fine in itself but you haven't decided if you are going to follow the model or break with it creatively and intelligently. For example, the broken octaves and scale runs have been done to death esp with roots in the bass.

Now on the positive side, your harmonic wanderings are the most interesting part and I could see this being a nice parody of a Clementi Sonatina (think early Poulenc doing this)
Plus I like how you exploit the pianos lower and higher registers. The more contemporary piano writing in the middle seems like a good idea for contrast and "parody"

Sorry if I sound harsh but there is SO much more you can do with the piano. I advise listening to Prokofiev - Vision Fugitives, Scraibin, Bartok, Ginastera's Piano Concertos, and listen VERY carefully to the late Beethoven Sonatas - the last three especially. And do listen to Clementi's Sonatas - very interesting stuff and foreshadows Beethoven's middle period piano writing. Plus Mozart - some of his late sonatas too.

As for non-classical, Cecil Taylor for wild piano writing, Oscar Peterson, Errol Garner, George Shearing, Bud Powell, Art Tatum - all offer intersting stuff.

But to start, I suggest studying the Clementi Sonatas first. Then move to Prokofiev, Poulenc etc...
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