pop/rock piece lyrics

I decided to write a pop/rock piece - and i figured i'd start with the lyrics - well...here they are
lol hope you like them! (I am terrible at english, so my choice of words probably isnt very good)

I WANT TO KNOW


Why do they do this
I just dont understand.
They smile and tease us
But we know its all planned
They flirt and they please us
But what does it mean
Cuz when you pursue it
She turns her head and leaves.

Oh, I want to know
What girls are thinking
What goes through their minds
When they hurt us like that.
If only they'd show
Just what they wanted -
Oh, I want to know.

I met this sweet girl
At a party last week.
We talked and laughed
And as we started to speak
We smiled, leaned closer.
And closing my eyes, I sigh -
Oh. am I such a lucky guy!

But what do you expect
When everything is goin cool?
She pushes me away.
I feel like a damn fool.
Now I'm standing here
With nowhere to go.
Now what do I do?
Oh, Oh, Oh, Oh!

I want to know
What girls are thinking
What goes through their minds
When they hurt us like that.
If only they'd show
Just what they wanted -
Oh, I want to know.
I want to know.

The END

come on guys! lol
u know u want to COMMENT!

I might not be an amzing writter for songs but when i like some lyrics i can honestly say i like them AND i like your lyrics alot!

Well Dun M8

wow! thx so much

i honestly thought ppl would comment on how bad they are

lol thx for the support!!

mitche, when are you writing the song for your lyrics? I will be glad to give you some help and will be interested in the final piece

thanks again soo0ooo much!

i will start writing the song in the next week and as i write a chunk of it i will try to post it here




Mitche

Also, no offense ben, but i really appreciate ur support for my lyrics

and i would also like if one of the older and more experienced composers in this forum would comment on my lyrics too

(lol its just cuz ben's only 16)

lol again - thanks soo much ben for ur encouraging remarks!!