Pour la prêtresse du temple de la lune

Hello!

I'd like to share with you a simple composition I did a year ago (I hope this is the right category to post it). It's for solo harp and it's a piece built on the opening theme of one of Debussy's pieces from his piano collection "Epigraphes Antiques". I'll attach the relevant excerpt in case some of you are not aware of it. As always, I would be most interested and grateful to hear your comments. In any case I hope that you will enjoy the listening! Thanks!

Pour la prêtresse du temple de la lune (For the priestess of the temple of moon)

it might be a typo, but a quick correction is in order: it's "Prêtresse".


a few notation issues: in measures 2-4, 10-11, 16-17, 19-20, and again in 37, and 43-45, you have stems in the wrong direction in the upper staff, which is causing beam colissions between the upper layer notes and the cross-staffed notes.

You should also check, there are some spots, like measure 31, where the stems are in the wrong direction.

Hello QcCowboy!

Oops, you are absolutely right (it wasn't a typo by the way)! I wish I knew how to edit the title of the thread...

Is it absolutely wrong if the stems are in the wrong direction? I did that on purpose as I wanted to show the melodic "blending" between the left and the right hand. I will correct m. 31 as well as similar measures.

Alexandros

Edit: I uploaded the revised version. I also changed the tempo markings so that they can be counted by common metronomes (they were too low).

In measure seven, you change the clef to treble when it's already treble.

And as for the tempo markings, shouldn't it be "half = 44" when you're in 3/2 and "quarter = 88" when you're in 4/4?

Aurally, the piece was quite nice. Serene with dark undertones. . . mahvelous.

Hello spherenine!

Oh, you are right! I have so many careless mistakes on the score. I examined the tempo markings again and I realise that they are still incorrect. I must also correct the orthographic error in the title. Thank you also for commenting on the musical side of the score apart from the strictly notational!

I will re-upload the score soon. It's starting becoming a routine, lol! Soon I'll hold the record for the most edits done!

Alexandros

Edit ( ) : Ok, I revised the score taking into consideration spherenine's comments and did some additional changes. Thanks, by the way, to whoever who did for correcting the title!

Originally Posted by Alexander

Is it absolutely wrong if the stems are in the wrong direction? I did that on purpose as I wanted to show the melodic "blending" between the left and the right hand. I will correct m. 31 as well as similar measures.

yes, it is "absolutely" wrong.

stems do not criss-cross that way.

on a single staff, the upper stems must go up, the lower must go down.

Ok, I changed the direction and did some necessary melodic changes...

Wonderful! Really lovely. The harmonies are just right, dark but smooth and calm. Just right for a moon priestess!

Originally Posted by Alexander

Ok, I changed the direction and did some necessary melodic changes...

measure 31 the stems are still in the wrong direction on beats two and three.
and measure 34 the first three beats the stems are in the wrong direction.

Thank you pianistboy!