Prelude for Oboe and Piano

Here's the initial half an hour sketch for a prelude or short piece for oboe and piano. If you could give me your opinions and whatever considerations you have, that would be great.

the soundclick mp3 is linked here and the score is attached.

This was nice. Good for a half an hour's sketching anyway.
I like your harmony - quite pretty really, but at times not perfectly realized.
Bars 3 and 4 are really the only "chordal" bars in it - then you've a lot of 2-line stuff, and then some parallel stuff. I would work on more coherence. I don't want to say more homogeneity, but that's partly true - if your harmony is coherent throughout, then you can work on creating contrasts in texture, etc. etc.
Same with the rhythm - sometimes going from quavers straight into crotchets is a little jarring - see at bar 14, the quaver motion dies, and all momentum is lost. A possible solution is to put a couple of murmuring quavers in the piano - just two or three, just to suggest that quavers pulse still underneath it. I know that's not really suitable for this phrase, which works quite well, but consider keeping rhythmic transitions smooth, except for special effect.
Last thing: you put a lot of emphasis towards the end on B natural versus B flat. I suggest that this should become of some importance to the piece, otherwise your stressing it here will seem 'out of character', and won't make sense in the long run, as it'd be inconsequential.

Lots of waffle for a short piece, but I like what you have.

thanks ^_^

the opening phrase is exactly the same as Ravel's Prelude pour Piano.
coughplagiarismcough

the opening phrase is exactly the same as Ravel's Prelude pour Piano.
coughplagiarismcough

That's what I thought too just by looking at the score. I can't get the mp3 to work... I don't think it's bad though if the whole piece will be based on this for its thematic material. I've done something similar with a piece for harp where I borrowed a motive from Debussy and based my piece on that.

Alexandros

Originally Posted by Alexander

That's what I thought too just by looking at the score. I can't get the mp3 to work... I don't think it's bad though if the whole piece will be based on this for its thematic material. I've done something similar with a piece for harp where I borrowed a motive from Debussy and based my piece on that.

Alexandros

But i bet you would credit Debussy with it if you posted it here.
Not pretend it's your own work.
To me, hes taken the Prelude, ruined it, and posted it as his own work.

I've already posted the piece here. I just mention at the beginning that it is composed on a theme by Debussy and I think that's enough, because the piece itself is a wholly new composition and you can definitely say it's my work.

Pour la prêtresse du temple de la lune

As for Alex's piece, he has only used the beginning of the prelude as far as I can see and has expanded a bit on it...

Alexandros