The Second Star To The Right [Improvisation]

First off, let me restate what I said earlier. I in no way aim for perfection, though maybe I should. This composition is probably incredibly flawed (I just know it is...) Also, let me remind you that I play by ear and can't read notes...therefore, I know not how to write scores and such. I apologize for this inconvenience and amateurity.
Even with all of this, I hope that my work is worthy of some critiques and feedback. I promise I'll be open-minded (as long as the critique is acceptably respectful, I dont appreciate bashing. ) Thank ya all very much!

The Second Star To The Right

EDIT: I'm also sorry if this piece doesnt belong in this topic .-.

Welcome to YC!!! First and for most.
Secondly, don't be so hard on your self. Because what you have here is actually really beautiful. The way you've re-imagined this classic tune is really nice. I would strongly encourage you to learn how to read music. Thats not criticizing you, its stating a fact that will help you for the rest of your life, especially if you really want to go into composition.
Also, work on keeping your legato, the flow of the piece. There were a few times where the flow got choppy.
Really you have some nice stuff here. Stay positive! We arnt as mean here as you've perceived us.
Keep up the good work. STAY POSITIVE!!!

Originally Posted by tenor10

Welcome to YC!!! First and for most.
Secondly, don't be so hard on your self. Because what you have here is actually really beautiful. The way you've re-imagined this classic tune is really nice. I would strongly encourage you to learn how to read music. Thats not criticizing you, its stating a fact that will help you for the rest of your life, especially if you really want to go into composition.
Also, work on keeping your legato, the flow of the piece. There were a few times where the flow got choppy.
Really you have some nice stuff here. Stay positive! We arnt as mean here as you've perceived us.
Keep up the good work. STAY POSITIVE!!!

Yeah, I'm scared of the forum .-. people seem so serious! Thanks for the feedback, I really appreciate it. And I'll try to stay positive

Originally Posted by tenor10

We arnt as mean here as you've perceived us.

LIES!!!! I hate you ALL!!!!

no. jk. <-- (I feel a little akward using this smiley)

I enjoyed the piece quite a bit. I will also kindly second what tenor said: look into learning to read music. Keep at it!

(I appretiate the humility. lol.)

I really enjoyed that piece...I'm not sure about the rest of you, but here, its nighttime and it's sort of set the mood so to speak, for now I am quite relaxed and a little sleepy. Not because it was boring, it wasn't. It was beautiful...in fact...I'm gonna listen to it again then go to bed.

I must agree with tenor10 where some of the flow seemed a bit choppy at points, but in general, not bad! Nice work, its a really nice piece, you should be proud!

Originally Posted by Dead Chicken

LIES!!!! I hate you ALL!!!!

no. jk. <-- (I feel a little akward using this smiley)

I enjoyed the piece quite a bit. I will also kindly second what tenor said: look into learning to read music. Keep at it!

(I appretiate the humility. lol.)

Thankies. I will try to learn how to read music. Everytime I try I forget. I just have to keep at it. =D

Originally Posted by Mr Lex.

I really enjoyed that piece...I'm not sure about the rest of you, but here, its nighttime and it's sort of set the mood so to speak, for now I am quite relaxed and a little sleepy. Not because it was boring, it wasn't. It was beautiful...in fact...I'm gonna listen to it again then go to bed.

I must agree with tenor10 where some of the flow seemed a bit choppy at points, but in general, not bad! Nice work, its a really nice piece, you should be proud!

Thank ya very much. I'm glad it relaxed you. =] I'll work on the flow and maybe I'll get around to posting an updated version of the piece.