Symphony C Major 1 Movement Allegro Moderato

Fist draft of my new symphony.

I know the range of timpani and bassoon is worng, so im going to fix that problem later.

Orchestration

2 Violins
Viola
Cello
Contrabass
Trumpet
Timpani
Bassoon
Flute

symphony nr 1 c major allegro.mid

This is definitely very Mozart inspired, especially with the orchestra size, though he uses more strings. I like the writing in the first section. It is very classical and it seems that each instrument has an interesting line. One thing to watch out for is the continuous thirds, it gets a bit disinteresting after some time. The sixteenth-sixteenth eighth motif of the B theme sounds a little awkward.

I also like the fact that this piece is in sonata form, though an introduction (slower) and an expository statement would greatly benefit the piece.

Good work.

Thank you mael!

Well, this does sound very Vienna classic style, with the harmony and ostinato figures. But, as for the form, it seems that you could use a lot more variation, more motive/thematic work and development. You get a solid start but then it seems as if you're treating it as something baroque, with sequences and sections with specific motives that don't carry on or aren't developed. I wonder if you actually planned out the form based on Mozart/Haydn sonata forms or you just winged it based on what you heard/saw.

Plus, there were some questionable divisi and other such techniques I didn't find that particularly necessary. Plus, there's also the question of instrumentation here, if you were shooting for a Mozart-style orchestration/instrument usage you will need to treat the groups a lot differently, and specially more as groups rather than mixing them around.

Another thing, is that if you're writing in-style, you shouldn't need to write the contrabass as a separate instrument, since back then it usually played the octave from the Cello staff. The contrabass only gained it's own staff later with Beethoven and onwards.

I think you need to work on producing a score of your music, even if it's unfinished. There are a lot of things that are easier visualized than described in plain text.

Thanks, No i did not shoot for the Mozart/Haydn form, the idea will be a modefied sonata form or something like that, with some thing new after the exposition. I feel some of the classical symphonies got a little much repeated. Intro, repeat, exposition, intro
i would think of something like this , intro , repeat , exposition , varation on intro, intro, coda.

Yes, please tell me how to fix the instrumental problem!

The structure and instrumentation sounds intelligible, but the harmonies are in need of fixing. Some sound rather crude and unintended (for example the parallel fourths, exposed fifths and second inversions).

thanks

I can't tell if you're being sarcastic. I didn't mean for my comment to sound horrible.

haha no no, no problem there is a lot to fix! and thanks for your help!

This has the style of Mozart without the catchiness of Mozart. Additionally, it would benefit you more to post a score of your work as well. I can't really comment on the piece very well without seeing the score.