Hi Kartapanis, the other topics you posted by mistake have been removed.
Your melody looks good. The phrasing is
mostly coherant, although if you are going for 4 bar phrases then there are some points at which your phrasing is off, like when the phrase ends at bar 16 and the next phrase appears to only be 3 bars long (bars 17-19).
As well as this, the pitches you use seem a little static. You should vary the pitches more, employing both leaps and next door notes.
I'd be interested to hear what you do with this melody in the full composition, don't forget to post it.
