untitled as of yet

hey all, this is a jazz ballad that I wrote for a male and a female voice duet. however, I'm not a lyricist. so, I sent it to a friend to try and do, but she hasn't come up with anything yet. so, the song is presently named after her. for the singers, I put in the trumpet and the Trombone, because I think everyone will agree, midi voices suck.

so, here it is , and unnamed (as of yet) ballad.

A very smooth arrangement which sounds great as an instrumental number. Lyrics are hard - the words I hear that suit the mood are "sunshine" and "walking" and I can imagine a number in a musical in a park by a fountain.

Originally Posted by Euler

A very smooth arrangement which sounds great as an instrumental number. Lyrics are hard - the words I hear that suit the mood are "sunshine" and "walking" and I can imagine a number in a musical in a park by a fountain.

I read Herb's remarks after I listened and saw the same theme. Walking thru the park one day.

I'm having a belly roll on the floor!

I'm sorry.

This is really great I loved it, but the ending was like crashing into a brick wall at 100 mph.

If this is suppose to generate a romantic mood I'd suggests a softer landing at the end.

Other than that, it was really nice.

Nice, nice, very nice, me like.....
Definitely walking through a park on a sunny day....not necessarily love oriented, but definitely happy....
...I wish I could write ballads, they're pretty tough. It was slightly predicatable chord-wise (not that that's a bad thing), but it worked.
I'd have to agree with Abra on the ending....it is VERY sudden. You could probably end with a formatta or something, or have the vocals sing the last line a'capella (SP?) and end with a little piano outro....
Overall, really nice job!

~Kal

thanks all...

I will do something about the ending. it is a tad fast.

also, I think it is interesting that you all saw a park on a sunny day. my vision of this piece was walking beside the water, maybe at a port or on the beach, near sunset. interesting. also, for lyrics, I hear "what would I do" in the pickup.

thanks for the input, I think maybe some revision is in order