This is the piece I talked about in my presentation. It mostly gathers my ideas of the past couple years, melodies that were running in my head when coming back home at night. I have composed it directly in a midi sequencer and it does not really abide any overarching formal constraint. I like it, because it was precisely what I wanted to hear, thinking “what would feel nice just next” and none of it felt forced to me (except when ending soli sometimes), but it is a way of making music I want to get away from since I want to begin again on good formal bases. Also please excuse the non-technicality and clumsiness of my talking about music.
So my questions regarding feedback would be the following:
1) What does sound plain unpleasant to you?
2) Formally speaking, what are the weaknesses preventing it from being enjoyable?
3) What, if anything, would deserve development in your opinion?
As for the flaws that I can non-technically perceive :
i) Ideas tend to be underdeveloped, perhaps too fast and heterogeneous
ii) Some solo phrases seem to go on for too long, I have often trouble ending solos in a way that feels justified.
iii) I tended not to care about chord progressions which may sound gross to the educated listener.
iv) Mouvement I is a bit uncouth and lacks ornaments
So basically, I like it, but I recognize it has to be a bag of mistakes and since I am willing to start again from scratch in music, I am wondering what I should retain from this work, and would like to have your opinion.
Thank you very much, I hope you’ll enjoy listening to this.
My name is Antoine K., I write from Paris in France.
I am joining this forum because I am looking for sharing with, and reading more from, young composers. My experience in music is sparse and irregular. I have always been an avid music - especially orchestral music - listener but quit music school in my early teens, so my formal musical education is lacking in many ways. I have been playing in informal bands and making naïve music for many years though. In other words I've been a passionate dilettante (the most detestable brood), and very isolated when it comes to composing.
After finishing composing a piece for a very long time aside from my studies I realized I had no way to evaluate it and could not even say if it was disappointing or not or was worth the effort, and as I said I am too isolated to get educated feedback. So I decided I needed to either stop messing around at all or get back to studying music seriously. I chose the latter. This implies getting in touch with serious composers, because I want to see how you talk about your music, how you evaluate each other's music, the language you use, the kind of question you ask.
So here I am, thank you for your attention, I am looking forward to reading from you.
PS : Also I have a passion for Stravinsky, a very extreme passion.