I'm not going to claim I know how this works harmonically, but the fermata end sections at 13 and 16 (and the recapitulation) broke the flow, and not in a Hungarian dance kind of way. Measure 36, trill from a D# to Eb?
I actually was writing these before the whole autumn competition thing was even thought of. I stopped halfway because it grew very tiresome and there were many things that I wanted to rethink about.
N.B.: Variation X isn't some postmodernist concept music; I literally just erased what was on there.