Interesting. I'm not sure how "fun" this would be to play, but it does sound pretty nice. Lush, and I can definitely attach a visual to this; always, always a plus. It doesn't seem to have much of a direction? It ebbs and flows but never peaks or troughs. I would have loved to hear a huge buildup only to have the sound quietly die away back to the FM7 chord. Speaking of seventh chords, I'd recommend experimenting with inversions a little bit. I hear your sevenths on top a lot and having something of a leading tone seventh in the bass and resolving up to a new key? Things like that are always cool.
Luis and Monarcheon, thank you for your feedback! First of all, I never create a score for my improvisations because I always consider them incomplete - in general as soon as I start notating I lose pace and start to feel restricted, before I eventually come to a halt, haha... I suppose I always treat them as a palette for a different selection of sounds to be used later, which is why my structure is often loose, or nonexistent. I do totally agree that I need to work on this in order to create a listenable experience, Monarcheon! And, haha, are you talking about the tiny irrelevant bit that sounds like Golliwog's Cakewalk...? :') Anyway, regarding the second one, the stopping here was mostly due to my technique - I haven't really delved into the realm of fast piano pieces so am more new to this type of playing! Thus, I tried to cover this up with sudden leaps, which of course were totally effective Finally, with endings, I never plan to end! Mostly my Improvs are about ~40 mins long, it's a relatively new thing for me to come up with an ending, and it certainly shows! I thought about an ambitious epic ending for the second, but had never done such an ending and probably wouldn't have the technique... Anyway, thank you so much for putting in the time to comment for me! I really appreciate it
1. Way too many stopping points. I know it's an improvisation, but imagine a concert having like 40 one-minute encores. Wouldn't that get annoying eventually? You hit your stride in the middle where it flowed and was relatively motivic but the end points of the piece were frustratingly irregular. The form in this one is bizarre. A lot of ideas and some came back but I wanted far more coherence from something that stopped to move forward. It's impressionistic to a point. When I heard the Debussy quote I was just ridiculously confused. It sounded out of place... irregular. The whole atmosphere of the piece never stayed in one place; it felt like a mixture, rather than a solution, if you know what I mean.
2. This one was much better. It mostly stayed within the realm of an idea developed. The ending is really strange, considering everything you've had before. Contrast normally also includes the endings of the piece, so consider me simply confused as to how that's a contrast to the first. Perhaps I'd appreciate a little less stopping and starting and more of a style change rather than a tempo one, but for what it's worth it's fine enough.