Lale's Lullaby

Hi all,

Here is a piece I wrote a few months back, tweaked recently, and recorded today just from Sibelius 6.

It's a simple lullaby attempting to be both accessible and interesting. It's also pretty easy, pianistically, so I hope all the pianists here feel free to have a bash at it!

Here's the YouTube link:

YouTube - Lale's Lullaby

Here's the score:

Lale's Lullaby.pdf - File Shared from Box.net - Free Online File Storage


Please leave me some comments, here as well as on YouTube. I really appreciate any feedback I get! :)

Thanks!

Danny


Lale's Lullaby

I love the harmonies of the trio section. it makes the return of the opening material much fresher.

A live performance would make this far more more beautiful.

Only criticism is the F major chord in root position. i really think it is too jarring. You harmony is somewhat unstable throughout - which I like - it seems to end with a major chord quite out of character. maybe adding a major 7th and 9th or 11th even and spreading out the voicing pp would make a better ending.

Hi Chris, thanks for the review & listen. :-)

You're right about the last chord.....I'm not quite comfortable with it....let me try some alternatives.

And yea, it would improve with a live performance ... but ... feel free! I'm sure I'll play it myself at some point, but I'd love all keyboard players to have a go at it. :)

Cheers!

It sounds vaguely lullaby-ish, like in some kind of limbo. I agree with CO, the middle part does make the main theme sound like some sort of relief, or "back to a peaceful sleep".

The only things that mark this as a bit too restless for a lullaby are the chords that appear to "block" the momentum sometimes (like at 01:06, for example), but maybe you intend them to be softer in a real performance.

I couldn't associate the music with the pictures, not that it matters much composition-wise. xD

I like it. :)

Yeah, it's not meant to be a real lullaby for soothing someone to sleep.... typical composers, eh!

And yea, the pictures were just nice pictures I found.... not really related. :P

Thanks for listening. :)

I'm not a fan of this one, because it's just not smooth and very flowing

Fair enough, peq. Any idea why? Maybe it was the 5/4 that made it seem not very flowing?
Any suggestions for how I could maybe improve its flow?

Any other takers? :)

Any more thoughts from anyone?

Daniel said:

Nice piece. I liked the 5/4. I looked at the score.

I tried to things on the last chord. Putting a B natural on top (instead of the A). Or doing ADF - f on top (so your doing a dm on top of the F) chord. Can't say either was better than your ending. A little more colorful?

hi daniel

i find that this piece are very natural and calming , because you use a lot of bitonal material on the transition , it will be very effective , and the section are very clear cut , it will be well controlling phasing

i like it a lot

dark-princess -kaka