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Everything posted by Monarcheon

  1. I agree in part with this; I think it could be mitigated by letting theme 1 develop in different ways while theme 2 ends up more orchestrationally prominent. Love the orchestration of the extended harmonies, though.
  2. In pure production terms, the voice stands as out as very dry and prominent in comparison to the rest of the mix. This is less of an issue during the verses, but is very noticeable in the chorus. Crash cymbals on every beat is also not a great sound, as it has a tendency to obscure offbeats. Compositionally, the switch of E7 going back to Dm7 and going to Am is an interesting one, though I don't think E7 always has to be in third inversion to make the voice leading smooth. Good first attempt!
  3. In the opening measures, the E-F motion in the high register seems a little naked without reverb support, or homophonic support like you gave it in later bars. In those same opening bars, I also feel the Am6 chord doesn't quite have a good effect because of the close spacing on the triad. The prominence of the string hits later on in the song, closer to 1:40 is a little unprecedented or led up to... it's a little abrupt.
  4. I agree with this. The opening measures's push and pull factor is great when there's counterpoint, but there might be more that be done dynamically to make the stases have a tad more weight. Lovely work, overall.
  5. Quartal progressions were interesting, especially over a pedal pitch. One thing I noticed was the piano's textural rigidity between sections, some more contrapuntal stuff with the solo might be nice.
  6. You say you want to avoid unwanted dissonances... but I'm assuming you don't necessarily want to follow Baroque fugue rules? Because if you did, the vast majority of this piece would need reworking, i.e. parallel fifths everywhere, parallel dissonances, incorrect chord resolutions. Operating on the assumption those rules don't matter to you, I'd still say that dissonance is the main issue here, since it obscures some of the chordal function of a lot of the piece. m. 14 is an example of that with a 7-8 bass suspension from B to C in the cello, but a motion to C on beat 4 before the syncopated resolution of the suspended tone. These sorts of little things exist in a few places (i.e. m. 20's G∆7 chord as a resolution to C). It's a well-thought out work, with an interesting take on the idea of fugue as a homophonic unit, but obscures the tonality a little bit too much.
  7. It's a great harmonic language. My main slight concern was the heavy consistency of the accompaniment in certain sections. The running notes in the beginning were great, at least for a while. Slightly more contrasting motion might be helpful to transition into the tremolo sections, keeping certain motives intact by way of "verticalizing" them somewhat to mix things up. It's a nice piece, overall.
  8. They may not be as prominent as you want them to be from the sound of this recording. The verticality and horizontality of this piece to me are at odds with each other. I can hear the horizontal imitation, but allowing for a blend of those elements I think could help this one along slightly.
  9. The use of the minmaj "I" chord is a nice recurring touch, though I feel like its presence could be heard more throughout, since it's a great introductory barrier breaker between tonality and a hint of chromaticism. It would also help build more cohesive indeterminacy for the audience, where any chord could be off-putting and yet totally applicable. Also, please consider reviewing other works of the forum here. I know you get views and reviews, but it helps us out if you contribute back here too.
  10. Your endings tend to have passages leading into them that break the harmonic qualities established therein. It might help if you lead the audience to that kind of ending transition with little hints of it along the way. Helps everything feel final. Please consider reviewing other works of the forum here. I know you get views and reviews here, but it helps us out if you contribute back here too.
  11. I don't quite hear the Bach. Bach favored a sort of compound melody implicit in the lines, that are often brought out in Schenkerian analyses. Most of this just seems to run on. Also, please consider reviewing other works of the forum here. I know you get views and reviews, but it helps us out if you contribute back here too.
  12. I agree with this, I think! The abrupt changes in texture and tone are I think the most stand-out to me, since little transitional material is accumulated at the end of every return of the ritornello, it doesn't serve the purpose of priming the audience to listen for the fancy stretto/fugal stuff that's going on.
  13. Nicely done, though I could possibly hear a little more percussion in the beginning parts, though its introduction near the end is a nice, climactic setter.
  14. I definitely wasn't expecting the choir, then the orchestral horns. Makes it seem a little... I don't know, off-brand? Basically, I wasn't really able to keep up with the shifting tones very well, though this could be mitigated with an extra chord in your unchanging progression, maybe a VI chord to capture the sonority of the more orchestral sound.
  15. I agree that the syncopation is not an issue, and Quinn cites a good example. It's mainly the counterpoint in the a' sections of every phrase once the percussion comes in that kind of clash that may be the reason you think it might sound a little off. It's not bad, and you don't even have to change it, it's just that audiences (including yourself) will hear those lines as a fluid line jumping in register because of the quick pace. You could even rhythmically highlight that! Nothing wrong with that, just something to be aware of.
  16. There are a few spots I find a little strange; interesting in concept but might need more voice leading to really make them shine, like the Bb minor chord in second inversion in m. 16. It's cool because it's a reharominizing of the bass note with a different function, but the tenor voice's motion makes its arrival sound more awkward than it needs to because of a necessary magnitude and direction change from the otherwise semitonal motion. Tonskald also makes generally good points.
  17. This is so called "jingle" music, yes? They'll be much more interested in the sound design of it all, rather than the actual composition, which looks to be rather complex. In other words these musescore/finale/sibeius sounds aren't really going to do. Adding more prominence to the percussion with an emphasis on pandiatonicism would probably be more helpful to immediately getting the audience to your side without sacrificing the counterpoint.
  18. It's nice overall, though a few things to consider: *the percussion notation on suite one is really confusing. If it allows, you should probably go into the settings and change where the notes appear on the staff. The use of x and open noteheads is also confusing. *in suite two, you have some artificial harmonic G's, which is next to impossible, considering G is an open string, thus you can't press a finger down to make it. No need for "artificial" in those cases. The development of themes was nice! I just kind of which they were treated a little bit less rigidly... the "surprise" section in the first suite is one such instance, where it doesn't feel like too much a rhythmic departure.
  19. Interesting ideas. As much as I do enjoy added effects it certainly does make some music less accessible. The low-fi effect might be a little hard to implement, at least in a strictly compositional way, since Forte never dealt with microtonal pitch class sets haha. Can you imagine??
  20. Y'all could like the video too 😉 Jk, I'm glad you all found it at the very least intriguing! It was super fun to write!
  21. Neat little work here. We can't break away from our habits, can we? 🙂 Maybe you would do this on a more powerful notation software, but some of the sixteenth note leaps and stuff made it look a little bit strange and hard to manage; the rest beaming would have worked well for it. I think I may not also agree with all of your pedal markings since they do span over a lot of notes, but I can't deny it's a neat effect. The chromatic motion used as a supplement to the Schenkerian Ursatz was super clever. I enjoyed this a lot!
  22. The harmonies and "close transformations" (in a Neo-Riemannian sense) between chords are lovely. The change at around the 6:30 mark was extremely welcome. I got a little tired of the repeated statement of the theme in different instruments in the beginning portion; it's such a tender and malleable theme. Maybe I just thought more interplay could be done as opposed to featured appearances (I adored everything after that 6:30 mark, for instance). However, I do see how everything comes in line to form a specific atmosphere, and I can't take that away from the work. The force of the dichotomy of constant formal motion vs. static developmental motion is not lost to me, but feels a little bit too literal. Fantastic work, though.
  23. Here's mine! I know it's a little weird, but I really enjoyed writing this!
  24. Hi, everyone! This is for @Left Unexplained's Christmas Music event! The piece is based off a PC set (025), formed from the first four notes of the original tune, and twisted in wild ways. Thought I might add a little variety to the pot. Hope you enjoy!
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