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My other two Rondos


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These are my other two piano solos composed recently, wish you like them. And @Monarcheon, welcome your commentation.

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Hi

The first one is like a dissociation. The main theme is very classic and naive, and the subordinates are more elaborated and romantic. It's always difficult to reconcile the styles of the past.

The theme in the Op 97 is much more elaborated. But I like it more because it sounds more coherent in style.

Anything is a very nice work, I would like to see the score while listening...

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1. To me, most attempts to keep it harmonically interesting were forced... they didn't really use borrowed chords or augmented chords or anything, it just kind of happened. Also, the passages where you linger on the dominant V chord went on for probably a bit too long. The melody in the beginning is very... plain; too plain without very clear variation, at least.

2. Much more polished than the first one. I guess my main problem with this ones is that any runs or trills you add don't really feel like Liszt or Chopin where is all intertwines eventually and becomes part of the structure; they feel distant. The part where you have a pedal C in the bass (along with other notes) felt naked, as well. Other than, pretty nice.

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Personally, I would think that the main theme should be the most enticing part of a rondo, so that its return is always the outcome we most want to hear. In the first rondo, I felt like the main theme was a lot more plain and a little underwhelming compared with some of the other sections. It's obviously very classical in style, which isn't necessarily a problem, but I think it could use a little embellishment and maybe more harmonic interest, even when it's first introduced. I also agree about the section which vamps on the V a bit too long. I don't see any other problems with it  

 

I enjoyed the second much more. Clearly, your writing improved between the two. Overall, I really enjoyed listening to both of them. And I agree with Luis about the score. It's always easier to give more detailed opinions when you can see what you're hearing. (Especially if your ears are not as well trained as monarcheon's)

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