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A composition by me trying to depict our Planet Earth and how we humans are affecting it.
Consisting of 5 parts, Home starts in the pure and intact nature, a kind of peaceful musical environment, and then goes to the next part which is construction and consumption and goes on until it gets to a so called destruction and annihilation part which is certainly a harsh and dark part.
Then the song reaches an uplifting part where humans are taking part to rebuild and reconstruct the planet.
And then again in the end we have the first part which is the pure nature, leaving the listener in a condition where he or she should decide on what will happen next or better to say what to do next.

Would be really happy to know your ideas, comments and reviews. by the way the music is actually written with the concept to be synced with video scenes from nature and other places, so consider it.
 thanks in advance :)

P.S. Sorry I don't have access to a good Internet Now so I had to give you the link to my soundcloud.

https://soundcloud.com/aronfard/home

 

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I'm always the first proponent of more chord variation. While I thought it was clever how you went from Eb minor to G# minor then back to Eb minor, everything within those sections got quickly stale... similar chord progressions in the Eb minor parts and I think only a couple other chords in the G# minor section. On top of that, the same motifs largely repeat in these sections which adds to that feeling.
The horns are going to get tired of playing that. It's bellowing and doesn't really stop for a good enough breath, especially in the G# minor section.
I didn't get a sense of harshness through any of it. I got a sense of volume, definitely, but I don't think that's what you were going for.

Doesn't sound bad by any means, there's just a lot of the same for something that should be a lot more impactful.

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55 minutes ago, Monarcheon said:

I'm always the first proponent of more chord variation. While I thought it was clever how you went from Eb minor to G# minor then back to Eb minor, everything within those sections got quickly stale... similar chord progressions in the Eb minor parts and I think only a couple other chords in the G# minor section. On top of that, the same motifs largely repeat in these sections which adds to that feeling.
The horns are going to get tired of playing that. It's bellowing and doesn't really stop for a good enough breath, especially in the G# minor section.
I didn't get a sense of harshness through any of it. I got a sense of volume, definitely, but I don't think that's what you were going for.

Doesn't sound bad by any means, there's just a lot of the same for something that should be a lot more impactful.

 

Dear Monarcheon,

thank you very much for your time and consideration, I really appreciate it, that was the kind of comment I wanted, really professional and technical.

But you know, about the chords I actually tried some other chord varaitions but they didn't get me where I wanted and didn't deliver the feeling I wanted, although you're right it can make everything stale so I will work on it.

about the other things you mentioned I agree with some, but I am not so sure, I should think more.

however, great review,

thank you again, you're awesome :) 

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