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They're pretty well written. I will say that I didn't particularly like it in terms of sonic quality, but that's a subjective rather than an objective criticism.
The first movement sounded a lot like late Boulez-style serialism (even though it's not) which never sounded coherent to me. The metric inputs you have, in my opinion, need to flow better, because it all sounds amotivic, which goes against a feeling of identity. 
I thought Traced Over Time needed more. Maybe you were too focused on establishing an identity to venture out too far within its own style, in the way, say, Schubert or Webern would have done.
It's very well written, and I commend you for it!

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Nice work. Here's my thoughts.

1. I like the jazzy feeling of this movement. It is nice, but I do much prefer the piano part in here as the cello sounds pretty sporadic. This is supposed to be "Love" but I really don't feel that coming across in the cello part.

2. This one I really enjoy, it's really interesting and has very good buildup and use of repetition.

3. A wonderfully delicate and atmospheric movement.

4. Another great movement. This I could see being used the backdrop piece for film or tv, it's very grabbing and directed.

5. Also great.

6. I like your theme here a lot.

Overall this is an excellent piece - the audio rendering really doesn't do your music justice and I do hope you will be able to have it performed. Your music is beautifully intricate with a clear sense of vision, and your use of rhythm is fascinating.

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14 hours ago, AgentAbacus said:

As for 5: do you mean more variety? Maybe more of a climactic moment? There is the sort of repeated chord ostinato, which I've learned recently is kind of a hard sale after 4, it also being a repeated-chord ostinato movement, lol. There may be too much sort of functional fixedness in the different parts here.

Sure, maybe. But you've heard scherzos entirely based one constant rhythm haven't you? I offer this example:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Q5hP5IikHcI
If it's making a deliberate artistic statement in functional fixedness, then fine, I can't change that, and it's atonally based anyway, so pitch doesn't matter and rhythm is simply ever-present. Just for an audience's sake, I'd say, branching out could be a really interesting or jarring change! :happy: 
Once again, congrats on the fantastic piece.

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