Johan.Stertman Posted June 30, 2017 Share Posted June 30, 2017 Hi, I'm new at this forum and at writing music. Had a go on a orchestral piece about pirates. Please feel free to listen and criticize. Any input is very valuable :) Cheers! 2 Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Monarcheon Posted July 1, 2017 Share Posted July 1, 2017 Cool! Couple things: Opening section around :27, when you have the second part of the period, I would advise against creating a leap to the tritone for your resolution; feels a little bit stilted, but carries on well enough despite it. EDIT: As the piece went along this tritone jump sounded a lot better, maybe just change the orchestration in the beginning to cover up the incomplete feeling just a tad. In the section after that your violins go from D -> F# which pulls the ear away from the natural want for a seventh or a diminished altered 5th to resolve down. It's not wrong by any means but the ear wants to hear it go to C#. The fact you repeated it helps it in the way it is though! Great use of chromaticism in the section following! 1:29 - octave jumps that fast in the clarinet or bass clarinet aren't exactly ideal. Fifths are fine, like in the bassoon. The mixing on this one is a little weird. The last section I hear as super epic and awesome with an altered chord with the III (SO COOL), but it's still super quiet. Don't be afraid to use a full dynamic range; it's what gets us attached. Also I think you don't need the trumpet holdover on the last note; just end it with the short finale note finish, maybe with some higher string notes (tonic, maybe?) and it ends with the same energy it started. Great work with this. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Johan.Stertman Posted July 1, 2017 Author Share Posted July 1, 2017 Thanks Monarcheon for taking the time! Nice to get some opinions on the content of the music . I will definitely look into your comments and see what I could inprove :) Cheers! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K.M.M Posted July 3, 2017 Share Posted July 3, 2017 nice. feels alot like pirates of the carribean. you got the perfect idea! NICE! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Johan.Stertman Posted July 3, 2017 Author Share Posted July 3, 2017 @K.M.M No denying that! :D Happy you enjoyed it! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
K.M.M Posted July 3, 2017 Share Posted July 3, 2017 btw. um next time, post something like this in the incedental music. THat is for themed relatied music. And scores, which is like this. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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